Describing The Scene DRAFT - By Tiare

Describing The Scene

• At a farm
• Surrounded by long grass
• Winter morning
• Girls gossiping
• Hiding by the trees
• The clothes are from a while ago
• Girls and Boys
• Terrified
• Corrugated Iron
• Running away from something or someone

DRAFT - Of 9 Sentences

One winter morning, both of the boys and girls were playing with each other like every morning until they saw a figure trying to hide. They started running away with a terrified look on their faces. As they were running they came past a little hut made out of corrugated iron. Once they saw no sign of the figure they went to hide behind the trees that were right in front of their eyes. As soon as they made it some of the girls started chattering to each other until they heard a most unusual sound. It sounded like a person that desperately needed help. They heard it again so they went to check it out. They had a look but it was just a speaker trying to get their attention. They started laughing.

Here is my DRAFT of 9 Sentences. It tells you a story about kids they were visited by a stranger. I have bullet point on the top because that was my brain storm or thinking.

DRAFT Stretched Sentences - Afu, Jessie and Tiare

LI: To write a stretched sentence.

Who: The old lady walked.

What: The old lady walked slowly.

When:As night began to fall the old lady walked slowly

Where: At the strike of dawn, the old lady walked slowly through the park.

Why:At the strike of dawn, the old lady walked slowly through the park so she could go to watch the sunset go down.

 

Who: The Little girl

What:The little girl danced like a ballerina.

When:As sunset fell, the little girl danced like a ballerina
Where:As sunset fell, the little girl danced like a ballerina through the garden,

Why:As sunset fell, the little girl danced like a ballerina through the garden to

practise her ballet dancing.

Who: The Little Boy

What:The Little Boy cried

When: As night fell, the little boy cried

Where: As night fell, the little boy cried while looking out his window

Why: As night fell, the little boy cried while looking out his window as lightning approached the sky.

Today in LS2 the year 7 and 8's had to do stretched sentences to make it more interesting and powerful,while using the 5 W's. while we were doing it Afu Jessie and I we thought of an interesting sentence to write down, but it took us quite some time to think of one but we managed to finish in time.